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Ultraviolet- Prologue by ~Orihime922:iconOrihime922:



~Prologue~
A Night Like All Others

Another night, another kill. In this life you cannot think of your prey as humans; sympathy is not an option. You kill or you die. Those are your only choices.

As a vampire, there is no choice on to kill or not to kill. You kill to live and you live to kill. You are a creature forced to hunt under the dark ultraviolet sky so that you are not seen.

It’s a lonely life--in the beginning anyway. But as the centuries go by you find the company of others less and less enjoyable. It became such a trivial matter after all that time; at least I think of it that way.

Eternity also seems promising in the beginning, almost romantic. But that is yet another misconception. Eternity is rather dull. Day after day things remain the same. Like I said, you kill to live and you live to kill. There is no romanticism in it, it’s just tedious.

I walked out from the shadows of the alley, leaving my most recent prey dead behind me, walking back into the crowd, immediately blending in with the night.

Being a vampire these days is absurdly simple. You can go out in the sun, a feat unthinkable for the first vampires. We also have no problem with garlic, crosses, or anything like that. That was all a myth to begin with.

It is amazing to think of how much we’ve evolved over the years… But like I said, none of those ailments trouble our generation anymore. We live almost completely normal human lives--other than the blood thing, of course.

As I turned the corner, another prostitute, not too different from the one I had just disposed of, spotted me.

“Hey mister,” she cried running over to me, pressing her unusually large breasts into my side. “Are you busy tonight, sweetheart?”

I smirked, looking at her, trying to dazzle her with my looks. And it worked.

“No, actually, I’m not,” I said shooting her a wide toothy grin. “Why don’t we go find a hotel, is that a good idea sweetie?” She was breathless for a second, and then soon regained her composure.

“Of course,” She grinned, attaching herself to my side.

I smirked as we walked down the street. It looked like I would be quenching my extra thirsts tonight. Not to mention a quick after dinner snack.

As we walked down the street I decided that yes, I would have to say that tonight would be night like all others.
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This is the new vampire story I'm starting called Ultraviolet, so here is the Prologue! Please read and comment ^^

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:iconmidsummer-snow:
O___o COOL. I am so going to be reading this story. I have a recent thing with vampires :XD: I like to draw them.

I think it's quite cool that you've taken on the first-person role of a male character. I almost always write in third person. And I'm better at writing about females beacuse I'm a female myself ^__^;;
You have quite a knack for writing I think ^.^ It makes me want to write something. :XD: ^^;

Can't wait for more! Yay! :heart:

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Thank you so much! I've never written from first person from a male perspective before. @.@ It's really hard!

I'm on a vampire thing too :XD: I like it! So I started this story! It's gonna be lon :XD:

I'll have more up soon!

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I hope you don't intend to publish it with that title, because there already is something called 'Ultraviolet' out there... X3;; ( [link] It was released last year)
Other than that, it's a nice story <3 I like it... But I have some questions as well..
Why does he kill every time he eats? For a human to die, they need to lose over a gallon of blood, maybe even a gallon and a half. A plastic milk carton can hold approximately a gallon of liquid.... If you were thirsty, could you drink the entire thing without either throwing up or bloating twice your size? I know other vampire stories have their vampires kill every time they eat, but wouldn't it add up? If he eats (Let's say once) every night, he would be killing seven people a week, thirty people a month, three-hundred and sixty people a year... and others tend to notice that kind of thing waaay too quickly. Wouldn't he be chased by the police in a matter of days? (And if he really was drinking that much from each person, wouldn't it take too long?)
Not that other writers haven't used it (Anne Rice, to name a famous one), I'm just confused about the realism of it.
As for grammar and all that, it's nicely written, but there is one typo in the male's diologue (Unless of course you meant it that way...)... He says 'Sweaty' instead of 'Sweety'. (As in...'one who is covered in sweat') Just thought I'd point that out to save embarrassment. ^ ^:
Well, that's about all I've got to say. Keep writing~
(You DID ask for advanced critique....and I know I'm always mad when people never give me one when I ask, so here you go. I wasn't trying to slam you or insult you or anything, just trying to give a little helpful advice.) ^ ^ Good luck with the story~

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yeah, there are some typos. want me to be your editor again? xD


also, there are some things I need to tell you about vampires. so get on aim. XD

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Yes please :XD:

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Thank you very much ^^ I really like it when people give me critique ^^

Just to say I didn't remember that there was something called Ultraviolet :XD: Thank you for reminding me! And he doesn't kill everyday, and not in the same place each time too! I'll have more about that in chapter one ^^

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:iconmidsummer-snow:
Wicked!! :heart:

The longest story I wrote was about 30 000 words...But the plot had only just started to thicken :XD: So it was far from finished. But I got bored of it ^^; I haven't had any good ideas since then.

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:XD:

I wrote a 700 page story and then threw it out 'cause I was stupid ^^

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You're welcome X3
And yeah, I only remembered it because I saw it on the airplane on the way to Japan last spring X3;
I'll be waiting for that explanation >w>
(And just so ya' know...ultraviolet isn't a color; it's a light-wave pattern thingy. Bees see in ultraviolet light....it kinda changes the colors...but I can't really exaplain. Here, this'll do it better [link] ....If you already knew about it, sorry~ X3; You just made it seem like you thought it was a color when you used it in the story. )
Good luck~

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